ITC 105 Assignment 1
‘The Challenges of the Airline Industry’ by John Doe and ‘Beyond
the Gloss: The Challenge of Flight Attendant Rosters’ by Jane Citizen are, as
their titles imply, two short essays on challenges in handling rosters of cabin
crew members of Airlines. Both writers have utilized legitimate
resources in order to emphasize their opinion and included relevant information
in their writings. However, in my opinion, John Doe has been more successful
than Jane Citizen in writing, organizing and presenting his view to the reader.
One of the techniques that John has used in his essay to
make it a success is the addition of his personal experiences in such an
interesting manner that grabs the readers’ attention quickly. As humans
naturally find stories interesting, it is always an effective practice to
follow at the beginning of a writing or a speech. And as the introduction is
the first to catch the readers’ attention, it is critical to make sure it is
compelling enough to make the reader wants to read the rest of the report. The
lack of excitement in the Jane’s essay makes a significant impact on taking it
to the audience. Therefore, I reckon John has been more successful than Jane in
writing when these two particular essays are considered.
Organizing facts in an uncluttered order is another key to
success in writing because poorly organized writings often make the reader confused
and tedious. Repeating the same kind of information in several paragraphs and
insensibly dividing paragraphs can be noticed in Jane’s essay. This clearly
shows her incompetency and makes her essay a failure. Although her report
consists of more rational facts than John’s, still she has been unable to
present them orderly so that the reader can understand her point easily whereas
John’s adhering to the structure speaks of his capacity in writing.
Failure to be precise and being too lengthy is another drawback
I noticed in Jane’s writing. The reader always expects only the most relevant
information in a precise manner in this type of a report. Therefore the writer
always has to be careful to present information in a short and straightforward
manner and not to include unnecessary information in her or his report. Use of direct
quotation can be noticed through out the Jane’s essay and it has made her
report too wordy and tedious to read. It would have been more efficient if she
had used indirect quotation in which she can avoid unnecessary information and
make the essay more pleasant to the read.
Unlike Jane, John has always used indirect quotation, which is more professional
and effective. It also helps avoid distractions and maintain the flow of the
essay.
Ultimately, the techniques used to make the essay
interesting to the reader, exceptional organization and presentation of facts
in John Doe’s “The Challenges of the Airline Industry” clearly make it a more
successful essay than Jane Citizen’s “Beyond the Gloss: The Challenges of
Flight Attendant Rosters”.
